Tuesday, September 20, 2011

Writing - Remember

Last week we worked on capturing a moment.  We used our five senses to help us take a snapshot of that time.  Makaela wrote a wonderful piece which takes you right into the scene and helps you share it with her.


Remember . . .
Remember when Nanny died . . . the taste of grapes in your mouth.  Remember the smell of peppermints and roses.  Remember the touch of material and cotton, and the hard wooden seats.  Remember everyone crying and the roses sitting in pots, and the big brown crate sitting in the middle of the room.  Remember hearing people sobbing and the violins playing.  That was the day Nanny died.
By Makaela

2 comments:

  1. WOW! Makaela!
    This is such a beautiful piece of writing.
    I feel like I was also at the funeral because of the images you have created in your writing. The way that you described the seats and flowers reminded me of funerals that I have been to.
    From Anna
    Room 14
    HES

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  2. Hi! I really like this writing because it was so detailed that I felt like I was there. I nearly cried. Great work Makaela.
    From Rebecca Room14

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